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Task response with teacher notes
The graph shows a significant grow of online study users between 2019 and 2023, growth especially among learners who need flexible preparation.
While the trend is positive, the main reason must be supported with data. Add one figure and compare it with the slower rise in offline attendance.
In conclusion, online lessons became more popular because students can save time and study from home. Good idea, but make the final sentence more specific to the task.